so, like, i need a favor

[tinpra]

I need someone who has read "Do You Remember" to take a gander at part 5 (preferably in light of the work as a whole, but I'll live if you just do a re-read). I re-did the last paragraph and I need to know if it's okay. Here's a link to the original version on lfn_fanfiction. And here's a link to the revised version on my messageboard. The change is specifically to what is the last paragraph of the original version. So if you can check that out and then look at what I've changed it to and give me your opin? Pretty please? With sugar-coated Roys on top? Or maybe chocolate sauce--

Right, getting off-topic. Anywho, it would help if you have read the entire story since I'm kinda concerned with how the change may have changed the overall tone of the thing, if at all. Thank you to anyone who does this! Mucho love!

Comments

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

Okay, so what I'm getting is the only real differene in the new version is that Amana's statement about Michael being hysterical over Adam was not scrambled; possibly heard by Ops and Maddie. He still cancels her; I don't think it changes his motivation as the damage has already been done.

Is that what you mean?

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

pretty much. i'd forgotten to put in that detail the first time around but didn't want to change the overall feel of it. thanks so much! and here i thought i was forgotten and unloved (woe is me).

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

I've been trying to get my blankity-blank site meter set up, and having all sorts of problems because I'm tecknolojicaly-challenged. Haven't been LJ hopping in a while; hopefully things are back on track now.

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

site meter? and don't worry about the non-review. no one else did either ;)

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

You can go to sitemeter.com and install a sort of counter on your web page or LJ or whatever to see how many visits you get. Neat idea in theory, but it doesn't work for me like it's supposed to. Typical.

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

well that's kinda poopie. you should write to them and complain

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

I'm sure it's just me; I have slug-speed dial-up. A lot of nifty 'free' things I try to download won't work for me. I have excellent friends to help me try to circumvent any obstacles, but if they can't, it's no biggie. I'm used to it.

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

Exhibit A: That is NOT the userpic I chose. I just checked my profile and it's there. It should have worked. Sigh.

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

I feel the uber-slow dial-up pain. That's what I have at home. I try to save all my needs-something-faster-than-41.6k things for work. Which reminds me there was an audiobook I wanted to download...

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

Do you have Microsoft Reader? It's awesome, and it even works for me!

BTW, the user pic I was griping about is there now. :rolleyes

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

i think i've heard of Microsoft Reader in connection w/FanFiction.net (of all things) but I can't say that I know what it is.

[nikita31j7.livejournal.com]

Go here Microsoft Reader for a free download. Then whenever you buy an eBook, select Micrsoft Reader as your format and ba-da-bing. Kinda hard to snuggle up to your computer for a bedtime read, but a decent trade-off for instant gratification without having to slog to a bookstore or wait on a mail-order.

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

Hey cool. Thanks!