so, like, i need a favor
Dec. 30th, 2006 01:30 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
tinpraI need someone who has read "Do You Remember" to take a gander at part 5 (preferably in light of the work as a whole, but I'll live if you just do a re-read). I re-did the last paragraph and I need to know if it's okay. Here's a link to the original version on ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif)
lfn_fanfiction. And here's a link to the revised version on my messageboard. The change is specifically to what is the last paragraph of the original version. So if you can check that out and then look at what I've changed it to and give me your opin? Pretty please? With sugar-coated Roys on top? Or maybe chocolate sauce--
Right, getting off-topic. Anywho, it would help if you have read the entire story since I'm kinda concerned with how the change may have changed the overall tone of the thing, if at all. Thank you to anyone who does this! Mucho love!
lfn_fanfiction. And here's a link to the revised version on my messageboard. The change is specifically to what is the last paragraph of the original version. So if you can check that out and then look at what I've changed it to and give me your opin? Pretty please? With sugar-coated Roys on top? Or maybe chocolate sauce--Right, getting off-topic. Anywho, it would help if you have read the entire story since I'm kinda concerned with how the change may have changed the overall tone of the thing, if at all. Thank you to anyone who does this! Mucho love!