opinion?

[tinpra]

Do these lines make sense (I know it's out of context) :

So when we die—balance has to be reached. We who have no souls, no life in ourselves. Oblivion would be kind, if oblivion were an option.

Comments

[moony-blues.livejournal.com]

We who have no souls, no life in ourselves.

This thought is incomplete. Is it "We who have no souls have no life in ourselves" or something different? What happens to them?

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

Out of context it doesn't make much sense, I agree.

The narrator had previously been describing some of the metaphysical aspects of a vampire's "life" and death. She had said, in the prev paragraph, that the body is animated by a soul and when the body dies the first time, the soul goes...wherever it goes. What animates the body afterward is an unexplained "parasite" that gets it personality from the imprint the soul left on the body's cells. So when a vampire dies the parasite has to metaphysically balance out the life it led....a life it could only have by literally stealing it from other ppl.

Does that help or have I just given you a headache?

[moony-blues.livejournal.com]

Maybe give me the exact context and I can see if the sentence makes sense in context? Without it, it seems like the incomplete sentence doesn't do anything to expound upon what's going on.

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

sent you a PM...forgive me if I'm being presumptuous :s

[shaxberd.livejournal.com]

So when we die—balance must be achieved. For we who have no souls, no life in ourselves, oblivion would be a kindness. If only oblivion were an option...

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

Thanks for the suggestion! I was definitely going nowhere with this on my own.

[tinpra.livejournal.com]

I should also mention how amazing similar your suggestion is to the one moony eventually gave me, a couple of hours before you posted.